1st Draft

Feedback
After finishing our first draft of our thriller we received two sets of feedback the first from Miss and the second, after watching each others thrillers, we each had to make at least 4 comments on how the person or group could improve their work. From the feedback by Miss we learnt that our thriller was a bit boring in the way that there wasn't enough variety of shots used in order to interest and build tension for the audience. This was as the character is vastly seen in long shots skipping, and in addition to this the contrast between the white of the backgrounds on the titles jars with the ambient background of the titles superimposed over the wood footage and in addition to this the initial titles at the start of our thriller didn't read well.


In addition to this feedback given from Miss, our class made comments on areas that could be changed/improved in our thriller;

• some titles were difficult to read
• repetition of 'heart thud' lost its effect
• some shots are blurry

However, we were also given feedback on good aspects of our thriller such as; clear theme of thriller represented, creepy and good character representation. 

Evaluation


Having received the feedback on our thriller we are now able to re-edit elements that didn't work such as the titles, but most importantly we have discovered that our thriller lacks variety of shots. Knowing this we shall be able to re-film aspects of our storyboard from different angles in order to make it more interesting to the audience as by doing this it will make our thriller more entertaining but it will also help to create more narrative enigma and contribute in building tension, which is essential in assuring that we have a clear representation of the thriller genre throughout our opening sequence. Furthermore, by getting feedback we have been reassured as to what aspects of our sequence work well and that we have managed to portray the characterisations and themes we wanted within our thriller.